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« Reply #15 on: January 09, 2016, 02:34:30 AM »
Chapter 13: The New Warren.

Summary (WARNING SPOILERS)
:kehaar finds a good spot for a new half-Efrafan, half-Watership warren.  However, plans to dig the warren are cancelled because :kehaar feels that the winter will come soon.

Review
I really don't know what to say.  Nothing really happens.  Vleflain isn't established yet.  It isn't even called Vleflain yet.  This chapter feels completely pointless and is so short that even if it introduces an important plot element that will be expanded later on (which I highly doubt), it would have been better off included at the beginning of the next chapter.  A minor detail which I find annoying is that :kehaar meets another gull, who doesn't have any accent.  He's the only one who does.

Rating: 3/5.
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« Reply #16 on: January 10, 2016, 01:20:56 AM »
Chapter 14: Flyairth.

Summary (WARNING SPOILERS)
Flyairth is finally forced to leave Thinial due to her obsession with the White Blindness.  She and her last litter eventually find the winter burrows at the bottom of the Down and are soon afterwards discovered by the rabbits of WD.  Over time, she becomes an important rabbit in the warren, earning the trust of several younger does that escaped from Efrafa, and at one point saving :hazel2 from a dog.  She also learns about the secret river, although nobody in Thinial sent the knowledge.  At one point, the new warren gets established with Groundsel as the Chief Rabbit.  However. Flyairth remains obsessed with the White Blindness, especially since the warren is near a path used by humans.  She thinks it should be evacuated entirely, but :fiver3 doesn't feel anything wrong.

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The chapter division sucks.  The previous one was extremely short and this one is overly long.  Anyway, about the chapter itself...it is rather good, I think.  :bigwig2 s outburst at the end is perfectly in-character.  The caracter of Flyairth is interesting (sorry for overusing this adjective).  Her obsession with the White Blindness makes sense, especially with her description of a rabbit infected with it.  Also, it seems to me that the character of :spartina in the series was loosely inspired by her.  Acorn dies, but this is only a minor event.  It gets quickly forgotten, it seems.

Are there any problems?  Of course.  No chapter is perfect.  Rabbits DO NOT LAUGH, unless they are from :cowslip s warren, but here Flesca (one of the Efrafan escapees) laughs.  This is a minor annoyance.  The part regarding the humans is rather good, except for a short passage from the point of view of the humans (who, unlike in the original, speak perfect English).  But these are only minor issues.

Rating: 5/5.
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« Reply #17 on: January 12, 2016, 12:51:52 AM »
Chapter 15: Flyairth's Departure.

Summary (WARNING SPOILERS)
:bigwig3 wants to kill Flyairth because he thinks she wants to take over the warren.  Eventually, he is convinced not to because she only cares about the White Blindness.  Flyairth eventually goes to establish a new warren at a place she considers much safer.  She takes a certain number of rabbits with her, but the main characters stay at WD.  :hazel promotes :hyzenthlay to co-Chief Rabbit because he likes the idea of a doe as Chief Rabbit.  Nobody opposes this decision.

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???  This is just...short.  Really the chapter division sucks: an overly long chapter between two extremely short chapters.  Anyway, this one was a slight disappointment after the previous chapter.  :bigwig s anger seems to have escalated far quicker than I would have expected.  Also, the title ruins everything from the start: it's obvious :bigwig2 won't kill her, she just leaves.  She says she's not comming back, which is rather annoying because her character had a lot of potential.  At least :kehaar is expected to come back to the Down with news from her new warren.

But I guess the part of this chapter which everyone will either love or hate is :hyzenthlay becoming Chief Rabbit.  It happens rather suddenly, :hazel2 just makes the decision and nobody opposes him.  But still, it is nice to see this happen, as :hyzenthlay was one of my favourite characters from the original book and the film.  Anyway, we will see how she does in the next chapter, probably.  It is called "Hyzenthlay in action", after all.

Rating: 4/5.
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« Reply #18 on: January 13, 2016, 11:47:17 PM »
Chapter 16: Hyzenthlay in Action.

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While :hazel is busy raiding the farm, a messenger from Efrafa arrives to announce that a group of Efrafan does from Efrafa have been sent to live on WD and are currently waiting at the new warren.  :hyzenthlay decides to go pick them up and :bigwig is really opposed to this idea.  She goes anyway.  Once she gets there, she sends them all to the Down while she says with Nyreem, who had hurt one of her back legs and was unable to keep going.  The two stay together despite the danger until :bigwig2 shows up, having gotten over his previous anger, and escorts them to the Down.

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In this chapter, it somewhat feels like Richard Adams really tried to imitate his style from the original book.  For example, there is a complete paragraph to explain :hazel s superstitious feelings about Nuthanger Farm, complete with metaphors and everything.  There is also another paragraph that describes the terror of staying in the open all night.  Does it work?  Most of the time, yes.

Now let's analyze :bigwig3 .  Despite the fact he did not originally oppose :hyzenthlay s promotion to co-Chief Rabbit, he really seems to have a lot of trouble to accept this.  He even seems to be forgetting that technically, :hyzenthlay outranks him, she is a Chief Rabbit and he is a captain of owsla (granted, WD never really had any strict organization like that, :hazel even said a few chapters ago that pretty much everyone is in the owsla, but :bigwig is still outranked).  A rather interesting detail is that once angry, he begins to curse the first rabbit he meets, who happened to be... :hawkbit , just like in the series.  The main difference is that in the series, :bigwig2 was often justified in his anger, but here, it's all his fault, :hawkbit3 just happened to be at the wrong place at the wrong time.  Also this is the first time :hawkbit2 appears in TFWD, if I remember correctly.  Finally, at the end, :bigwig3 really doesn't want to admit he purposely went to see how :hyzenthlay was doing and finally calls her Hyzenthlay-rah.  Just like for Hazel-rah, she needed to do something special for him to finally accept her position.  Overall, he behaves in-character.

Anyway, next character: Hyzenthlay-rah herself.  It's nice to have a chapter focusing on her.  Her desire to do something important to prove that she can be a good Chief Rabbit is understandable.  The part where she spends the night with Nyreem is really tense, even if you already know nothing bad is going to happen.  Let us not overanalyze the part where she asks :el-ahrairah for protection.  I've had enough of him, the last two stories about him were terrible, the previous two were ordinary and the previous two were also terrible.  I've had enough.  But the fact remains that :hyzenthlay really is one of my favourite characters, and seems to behave in-character.

About Nyreem.  She injures herself while trying to imitate Quiens, an older doe whom she greatly admired, and who probably also made it to the down.  But the fact remains that, so far, neither Nyreem nor Quiens had any significant character development.  We will see if they do important things later on.

This review has been long enough, let's just summarize it like this: perhaps the best chapter in TFWD so far.

Rating: 5/5.
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« Reply #19 on: January 15, 2016, 01:44:05 AM »
Chapter 17: Sandwort.

Summary (WARNING SPOILERS)
Sandwort is a young rabbit who is extremely disrespectful towards his elders and very rebellious, at one point being indirectly responsible for the death of another rabbit called Crowla.  This escalates until he ends up falling in a well, and nobody, not even :blackberry-buck , can find out a way to get him out, so he is left there to die.  However, eventually two children get him out because they were arguing over whether he was dead, and Nyreem and another doe called Tindra take him back to the Down.  After this incident, he becomes a changed rabbit and much more respectful.

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After three great chapters, it was too much to hope that this would keep up.  Sure, it isn't that bad, compared to others, but that doesn't make it good either.  Sandwort is an extremely unsympathetic character, and quite frankly I wouldn't have cared if he had just died in the well.  The idea of him being rescued by humans is very annoying, it probably would have been much better if :blackberry-buck had just thrown rocks down the well like :hawkbit2 did in the series to rescue :dandelion .  Nyreem does a few useful things, but the character development doesn't really go in the way I expected.  In the previous chapter, she was really determined to do her best to get a place in the warren, but here she just messes everything up by sticking with that idiot.

Rating: 2/5.
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« Reply #20 on: January 16, 2016, 03:19:57 AM »
Chapter 18: Stonecrop.

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Stonecrop is a big hutch rabbit who escaped from humans and reached the Down, where pretty much everyone wants to kill him because he stinks of humans.  :hazel s leadership becomes under severe threat.  :fiver says to send him to Groundsel's warren.  It is being attacked by weasels, and Stonecrop scares them away with his smell.  Groundsel considers him a hero and lets him stay at the warren.

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This chapter is perhaps the worst of the book so far.  :bigwig2 behaves strongly out-of-character and his change of attitude toward Stoncrop is way too sudden.  And then there is Stonecrop himself.  Firstly, there is absolutely no way he could have escaped the girl's grip.  In real life, he would only have succeeded in severely injuring himself.  Even if he made it that far, he would have quickly been killed by elil because he had never smelled any.  And scaring all the weasels away?  Seriously, he may smell a lot like humans, but he didn't lose his rabbit scent entirely, did he?  Finally, why does everyone want to kill him when the previous summer, most of the rabbits risked their lives TO GET RABBITS THAT SMELLED OF HUMANS?  This gets quickly dismissed as "they didn't smell as strongly" and "we really needed some does" but that doesn't mean much.  It is clearly said in this chapter that "wild rabbits always have to kill a rabbit who smells of men".  Also, the Nuthanger Farm raid was not really necessary for the survival of the warren, :sarcasm as :holly was negotiationg with Efrafa while it happened.

Also a few chapters ago, :kehaar was supposed to give news of Flyairth.  As of this chapter, there are still no news.

Rating: ZERO.
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« Reply #21 on: January 18, 2016, 12:17:31 AM »
Chapter 19: Campion.

Summary (WARNING SPOILERS)
:campion2 takes out wide patrols with the rabbits of Vleflain, much to Groundsel's anger.  He claims to do so because the rabbits in Efrafa are not interested as it reminds them of :woundwort .  :campion gets invited to WD, where he takes out many patrols and becomes a friend of :bigwig .  He eventually dies on a patrol and becomes a legend, who guides lost rabbits on patrol.

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The last chapter.  Now, of course, don't expect nearly as much character development for :campion as in the series.  It is just one chapter, and while he is the main character of it, his description doesn't go far beyond his interest in wide patrols.  The idea of him going to WD for a while is rather annoying.  Efrafa needs him.  Who knows what will happen while he's gone?  His death, however, is handled well.

:kehaar never provided these much-awaited news of Flyairth.

Rating: 3/5.

And it is over.  The average rating for part 3 is 3.375, higher than the other two.  The average rating overall is 3.05263158.
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« Reply #22 on: April 08, 2016, 01:29:19 AM »
I liked the stories in this book
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« Reply #23 on: April 08, 2016, 06:07:55 PM »
Quote from: CockatielPony on Apr 7 2016, 09:29:19 PM
I liked the stories in this book
What are your favourite chapters?
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« Reply #24 on: April 08, 2016, 10:38:36 PM »
Well that was.. interesting. I didn't read much of the spoilers, but I might just have to pick up this book as well (I haven't read the original yet, shame on me). Through it, I though it sounded like stories you would tell a little kid, like superhero stories and the like, but as it went on that theory made a little less sense to me. What do you think?
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« Reply #25 on: April 09, 2016, 05:35:40 PM »
Quote from: Strifer on Apr 8 2016, 06:38:36 PM
Well that was.. interesting. I didn't read much of the spoilers, but I might just have to pick up this book as well (I haven't read the original yet, shame on me). Through it, I though it sounded like stories you would tell a little kid, like superhero stories and the like, but as it went on that theory made a little less sense to me. What do you think?
Now that you mention it, several of the stories do feel like they were written for young children, especially in the first part.

The stories in the third part, however, aren't like that.  They feel more like the original book and the film.
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« Reply #26 on: April 09, 2016, 07:29:25 PM »
Quote from: Chipster-roo on Apr 9 2016, 01:35:40 PM
Quote from: Strifer on Apr 8 2016, 06:38:36 PM
Well that was.. interesting. I didn't read much of the spoilers, but I might just have to pick up this book as well (I haven't read the original yet, shame on me). Through it, I though it sounded like stories you would tell a little kid, like superhero stories and the like, but as it went on that theory made a little less sense to me. What do you think?
Now that you mention it, several of the stories do feel like they were written for young children, especially in the first part.

The stories in the third part, however, aren't like that.  They feel more like the original book and the film.
Yeah, I would've guessed so. I have both the books in my possession now, so I guess I'll say what I thought when I finish them.
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« Reply #27 on: July 14, 2016, 03:54:09 AM »
Well. I have just finished reading TFWD and I still think my previous statement was true. The stories in the first part of the book really seemed like stories you'd tell to a little rabbit. As for the last part of the book, I absolutely loved it. Especially Campion's chapter. He's quickly becoming a favorite of mine :)
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